PHOTO PROMPT © J Hardy Carroll
The train lumbered into the station; brakes creaked and wheezed it to a stop. He left the waiting room as eagerly as the last time. Excitedly he ran from banging door to banging door, scanning every alighting passenger for her.
When the platform emptied and the train pulled out, she wasn’t there; like all the previous times.
Disconsolately, he returned to the warm waiting room. Soon there’d be another train and if necessary, one after that. He’d wait for however many it took.
Wearily, he lay down on the hard floor and put his head between his paws to sleep.
Written for Friday Fictioneers – a 100 words story based on a photo prompt. Hosted by Rochelle. Read the other entries here.
Dear Michael,
That last line had me panting. Such a sweet story of a dog’s loyalty. Wonderfully written.
Shalom,
Rochelle
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Thanks Rochelle, the title’s from another one of the British Invasion, I believe, The Kinks.
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You caught me there… the loyalty and waiting. I loved your choice of verbs… lumbered and wheezing… really shows we do not need adjectives do we?
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Thanks Bjorn for your kind comments. I do like a good adjective though, quite a Dylan Thomas fan.
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Me too… on both accounts.
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Oh dear, you really tugged at my heartstrings there, Michael. Just so much the way a dog would behave. Well done.
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It was an attempt at getting the “aaah” factor this week. Thanks Sandra
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At first I saw the film Brief Encounter, then you hit me with the finial line. Liked Mike
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Thanks Mike
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Awww, poor fellow.
I can feel his longing and hope.
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Oh my heart! LOVE this.
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Thank you. Soft dog really, should’ve gone and found himself a bone to chew on. 😊
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Beautifully written and the last line caught me unaware. A lovely portrayal of a dog’s loyalty 🙂
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Thanks Clare
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Brilliant last line – I felt a pang when I realised it was a dog waiting for its owner.
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Thanks I’m glad the last line works because it relies on that.
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Just like the movie Hachi. Loved it!
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Thank you
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Such a beautiful, sad story, that last line really punches it. Dogs are loyal and honest, I guess that’s why we love them so much.
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Thanks. You’re right, their loyalty often puts us to shame.
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Awwww, the love of our pets is so often overlooked.
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Quite right. They deserve some recognition even if it is only 100 words 😊
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That last line made say “Awww…”
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That was unexpected and nice!!!
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Thank you. Glad you liked it
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