PHOTO PROMPT © CEAyr
Toby gloated over the estate and raised a glass, “Here’s to you mate. Never knew you’d made me your heir. I suppose being an only child, having the money, the girls, but never marrying, it makes sense you’d leave it to your poor old playmate from the village.
The times you fell in that lake. You were a good swimmer in those still waters but the ocean’s another proposition.
I didn’t know until a week ago, that is. Just before you went overboard for the last time.
Funny, you didn’t know it was me rocking the boat back then, either.”
Written for Friday Fictioneers – a 100 words story based on a photo prompt. Hosted by Rochelle. Read the other entries here.
What a snake in the grass! I hope he chokes on his wine. Nice build up and an unexpected ending – great story 🙂
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Thanks, yes it seems he’s always been jeaous/covetous.
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Showing his true colours!
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Not such a pleasant person, for all that good fortune.
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No, a particularly nasty person I feel, harbouring all that envy and just waiting for his chance
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Great twist there Mick. I didn’t see it coming.
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Thanks. I suppose that’s the main thing with a twist, that it is concealed right to the last moment
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Good point!
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How blind he was (or maybe he wasn’t?) to his “friend”…
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I think you have a good point there. Whilst the main character is quite evil, the other appears very naive about the true nature of their relationship, but then maybe he’s always had so much of the good life, he’s never had to worry about the bad side.
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Nice dark twist at the end.
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Thanks Iain
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I hope there’s plenty of arsenic in the chardonnay
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Yeah, he deserves it Bjorn. Thanks for reading
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I love the way you played this out, one line at a time. I read it twice, just to make sure I “go it.” Well done!!! Mate.
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Thank-you for another considered comment. I’m glad you liked it. Seems he was always evil and can do such a thing without compulsion.
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Dear Michael,
Talk about premeditated. Yikes. Well constructed, grisly story.
Shalom,
Rochelle
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Thanks Rochelle. Yes, seems he’d been harbouring his resentment a long time
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Ooh, nasty fellow. Great story, well written!
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Thanks. He is nasty isn’t he. Seems to be one of those that feels no remorse, no sense of sin
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Some friend!
Lily
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Yeah but it appears not just at the end when he wanted the money, secretly throughout thier lives he’s resented the other. Thanks for commenting
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Sounds like a lifetime of resentment built up. I like the way the reader starts off thinking that Toby is mourning the loss of his friend and then finds out that he’s not such a nice chap at the end. A well constructed story.
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Some friend. You built the antipathy beautifully.
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Thanks very much
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I can only hope that he will get his in the end.
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Yeah, I think he’s one of those nobody likes and everybody wants to see get his. Thanks for commenting Dawn
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