Copyright Dale Rogerson
An open pizza box, discarded crusts and half-finished cartons of garlic sauce turning rancid, littered the floor.
The room had witnessed too many box-set binges and reeked of sweat and stale duvets.
Kyle tumbled off the sofa, “What happened? I can’t remember anything after series two, episode four.”
He groaned at the debris of drug paraphernalia and empty bottles, his head thumped, his stomach heaved.
He yanked the duvet off his girlfriend, “Lola, wake up.”
The girl didn’t stir, her lips white against the crimson vomit that dribbled from them.
He held her tight, but his hot tears couldn’t warm her.
Written for Friday Fictioneers – a 100 words story based on a photo prompt. Hosted by Rochelle. Read the other entries here.
So sad, with the last sentence you brought humanity to this story.
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Thanks, Michael
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Wow! That prompt took you in a very dark direction
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Based on a scene from Breaking Bad, Neil, which as you know is very dark in places, virtually throughout actually.
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Another tragedy.
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Yes James, thanks for commenting
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That turned out bad, shockingly so.
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Yeah, it was loosely based on a scene from Breaking Bad and as you know, that whole show is shocking
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Great programme.
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Dear Michael,
That certainly took a dark turn…gruesome, in fact. Well done.
Shalom,
Rochelle
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Thanks, Rochelle
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As I started reading, I thought we had gone in a similar direction. Then so not. That was a most awful end (not the writing, of course!)
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Thanks Dale. I know the ending was awful but it happens, unfortunately
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It does..
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how awful, sadly a reality for some
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Yes, but I first saw something like it in Breaking Bad, which is where I got the inspiration for this one
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Awful ending but superb writing. Michael, this was so well written.
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Thank-you, it’s very good of you to say so
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A grim and cautionary tale.
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Thanks
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Drugs, pizza and sour wine ….. You used the mix well to caution.
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Thank-you, I’m pleased you liked it
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What a tragic end.
I can’t remember anything after series two, episode four. ~ this statement shows us a lot. Kudos
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Thanks, I liked that line myself
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Whoa, that ended badly. Very timely piece that all the overdose deaths on the news. I loved that last line.
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Thank-you and I’m pleased to say I’ve worked out how to post a comment on your blog now. 🙂
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Thanks for the persistence, I appreciate the comments.
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You’re welcome
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“His tears couldn’t warm her ” well done Michael
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Thank-you
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How sad. Unfortunately, it happens somewhere every day.
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I must admit it’s based on a scene from Breaking Bad that has stayed with me
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You’ve painted the scene well, the crash and the carnage at the end of the road.
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Thanks
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Sad tale with a tragic end (that I did not see coming). Well done.
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Thanks very much
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Such vivid pictures. And your descriptions of the smell of the place has my nose wrinkling. So well done.
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Thank-you
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You portray that hopelessness and sordidness so well. In my time of psychiatric nursing, I came across some tragic cases of ruined lives dues to drugs but, fortunately, never a death. It’s the dealers who supply impure street drugs who need dealing with, but then part of their power is due to insufficient funding for helping drug addicts through official channels.
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You’re right, it’s a situation that appears to be getting worse
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Sadly, it is D:
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That is truly horrific and sadly realistic. Very well written.
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Thanks, Clare. These things happen unfortunately
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A great pice of writing Michael, especially that last line.
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Thanks, Mike
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sometimes it doesn’t pay to have too much fun… the gods get jealous.
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Very true, sometimes we don’t realise we’re taking a risk in the first place
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So tragic, Michael. I still want to finish “Breaking Bad.” I was watching the show with my husband and we stopped at a similar kind of tragic scene. I want to get back to it becuase it’s so well written. You did a great job with this! It’s realistic but compassionate there at the end.
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It is a great show and brilliantly acted. The only criticism I would have is that sometimes the episodes are too drawn out. Sometimes you could cover in one show what takes two, which can make completing it difficult
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Oh my…how sad, and very descriptive! I saw it all.
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Thanks Dawn. It is sad when the risks we take in the name of enjoyment turn out tragically
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You did a wonderful job of capturing this terrible moment.
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Thank-you
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Just an awful vision of what can happen – what does happen – all too often. Emotionally told, Michael
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Thanks,Lynn
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My pleasure 🙂
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Dark insights into dark worlds of ordinary folks….
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Thank you. It’s a sad situation but it happens too often
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