PHOTO PROMPT © Rochelle Wisoff-Fields
“The sunshine defined us then,” Reg remembered, “But it’s not funeral weather, somehow.”
His shadow cast a twisted figure on the wall. Fleetingly he glimpsed the bullish version of his former self.
He pressed both gnarled hands on his cane, suddenly needing support.
“Well you’re at peace now, Maria.”
His bowed head shrouded tears falling and instantly evaporating on the cobbles.
“Nothing in the grand scheme of things, just a point along an everlasting line, but we were everything then.”
“Are you alright senhor?” A young woman had appeared beside him.
He smiled, “Thank-you, I will be in a minute.”
Written for Friday Fictioneers – a 100 words story based on a photo prompt. Hosted by Rochelle. Read the other entries here.
This brought a tear. Nicely done. It reminds me of when we took my dad to the funeral home to say a private goodbye to our mother and he said, “Goodbye, Rita. You take care of heaven and we’ll take care of the earth.”
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Thank-you, it’s obviously very rewarding for me to hear you say that. Your father’s love for and tribute to your mother was the very thing I was trying to show, I’m pleased it reminded you of that moment
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A poignant glimpse at a life. Nicely rendered.
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Thanks Iain
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Loved this, Michael
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Thanks Neil
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I am just beginning to understand the tenderness of a love that spans a lifetime. I identified with this story.
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Thank-you, that is so nice to hear on both levels and I’m pleased for you
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It’s terribly sad that we lose some people even before they are lost.
Brilliant writing, Michael and so touching .
“His bowed head shrouded tears falling and instantly evaporating on the cobbles.”, loved this expression, among others .
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Thank-you Moon. I’m pleased the sadness came across and you chose my favourite line
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i wonder who that young woman is that has made him smile. 🙂
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She’s jut concerned passer-by but who knows, she could be someone else more relevant, perhaps a daughter he didn’t know he had.
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So beautifully done, Michael. I think most people would want such a love…
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Yes, ideally everyone would find someone that meant so much in their lives. Thanks Dale
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Losses are always very hard, isn’t it?
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They are, thanks for reading and commenting
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Our lives seem so big to us and yet inhabit only a tiny space on the timeline of the universe. Insignificant and yet so very significant at the same time. Deep and thought provoking piece, Michael, well done.
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Thank-you for identifying that, it was the concept I was trying to explore. In our lives there are things hugely important to us which are huge to us and despite them having no import to the rest of the world, it doesn’t matter, the important thing is to have those moments, to live.
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Such a poignant piece,
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Thank you
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A sad little slice of life.
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Thanks, Draliman
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Ah, the thoughts that go through a mind at these times. You brought it home to us in all of it’s humanity. Wonderful and sad.
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Thank-you, I’m pleased you liked it
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Dear Micheal,
Such a sweet and tender piece. Apt descriptions and so much story layered between the lines. You made my computer screen blur. Well done.
Shalom,
Rochelle
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Thanks, Rochelle.
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I agree with Alicia, it did bring a tear. This was beautifully crafted.
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Thank-you, I’m pleased it’s had this effect on people.
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Oh… sad. Very well told. Palpable feeling of grief
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Thank-you, it’s nice to hear that because I’m never sure something’s worked until someone says it has
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A bittersweet moment of reminiscing. Reminds me of that old song, “When You and I Were Young, Maggie.”
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Thank you, I’ll have to look that song up now.
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Good story. Jeepers, gives everyone something to think about. Well done! Nan
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Thank-you Nan
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A beautiful and poignant write.
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Thank-you
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Well done, Michael. You painted the scene well. A very emotional piece.
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Thanks, I’m pleased it worked
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Very poignant. Makes you really feel for the protagonist and the love he shared with his Maria. And a beautiful line to emphasize it in ‘Nothing in the grand scheme of things, just a point along an everlasting line, but we were everything then.’
A beautiful piece. Glad, I stumbled across it through Friday Fictioneers.
Cheers, Varad
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Thanks for commenting, I’m pleased you liked it
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Oh, how sad for the man. A tear-jerker story this week, well told.
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Thank-you. It is sad for him, I think I’ll try comedy next week. 🙂
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I have a love like that. It’s a connection on a level I had no idea even existed. You did a brilliant job. :o)
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Thank-you and I’m pleased for you, I’m not sure everyone gets to be so lucky
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So sad for the one left behind. You’ve shown it well.
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Thank-you
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He clearly has some wonderful memories of their time together. Better to have loved and lost, eh? Though sometimes that loss is almost too much to bear. Lovely writing Michael
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Yeah, he’s old and lost his youth and now the most important part of his life, the love he shared the best of times with.
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Happens to so many of us
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There are so many great lines in this. It is a really well-written and moving piece.
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Thanks Clare
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My heart broke for him – nicely done Michael.
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Thank-you
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Nicely done. I like the way you incorporated time through characters of different ages. I look forward to you participating in my challenge. Feel free to pass the word along. 🙂
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Thank-you, unfortunately I didn’t get round to participating in your challenge, time caught up with me but I will make a point of making sure I accept the b=next one
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They must have been very happy together. His sadness will last longer than his tears, I’m afraid.
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Thank you for reading and commenting
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It’s always hard to lose someone you’ve spent a good part of your life with. Sometimes I expect my husband to complain the TV is too loud or something similar. I’m fortunate the lady who cared for him stayed on to help me so I’m not alone. Good writing, Michael. —- Suzanne
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Thanks Suzanne, I’m pleased it resonated with you
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Beautifully written.
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Thank-you for commenting, much appreciated
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A tender piece, tenderly written.
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Thank-you
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