PHOTO PROMPT – © Adam Ickes
Firstly, I’d like to apologise for the fact most of you didn’t receive a comment from me last week. I’d written quite a few before I realised they weren’t getting through. If any of you did get a comment once, you may have received it up to 3 times. I know Rochelle seemed to get one eventually in her spam folder.
I’m not sure if the problem is fixed, so any thoughts on how to correct this would be welcome. If you get a like from me with no comment following, you’ll know I still have a problem.
Anyway, here goes with this week’s story:
“The painting?”
“It’s here. The money?”
“I give you the painting, there’s nothing to stop you sailing away with both.”
Andretti pulled a gun.
Sweat ran down his temples and his hand shook.
“If you’re messing me…”
Buoys bobbed over the numerous lobster pots fishermen had planted earlier in the evening, white, orange but mostly pink.
“I always think how pretty those pricks of colour are.”
“Which one?”
Julian threw Andretti a mobile phone. “I make it back off this jetty alive with the money, I’ll text.”
As he sent, ‘The Pink One,’ he chuckled, “That should keep him busy.”
Written for Friday Fictioneers – a 100 words story based on a photo prompt. Hosted by Rochelle. Read the other entries here.
Michael Wynn 
There’s a anchor-weight of detail, plot and action here. I especially liked the fact that the loveliest detail (the floats) are also integral to the plot. There are a couple of oddities of English here, but those are easily corrected
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Very wise chap. He could have ended up losing the painting, the money and getting shot if he hadn’t been so careful!
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Like your contrast of the pleasant, nice setting for a criminal tale. Good work.
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Sorry, didn’t see your comment until now. Thanks and I’m pleased you liked it.
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I am not quite on board with the story line, sorry. But then I very rarely read crime stories. As for computers, I am even less able to help with them, sorry again. Mike
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Dear Michael,
I’ll admit to being a little lost in this story as to who was doing what. Perhaps it’s me.
Actually I had two comments from you in my spam folder last week. Stuff happens. It’s very nice of you to comment on everyone’s story. Not everybody does. It’s really what FF is about and how the community has been built.
Shalom,
Rochelle
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You got a lot of story into a hundred words! I wonder how long it took him to find the right pink one. I love how the ugliness of crime is painted against such beautiful scenery.
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What a brilliant plot, I love it. Clever guy, he’ll live long. So far no problems with your comments whatsoever.
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